In this blog I will peer review a student from another class. I will peer review Sarah Moskowitz's video about limiting screen time for toddlers. In this review I will look at the content of her video.
I think I helped her by answering some of the questions that she had left in her blog for her peer reviewers. She wanted to know how effective her quotes and statistics were specifically. I was able to tell her that they worked well with the images she chose in the background as well as the fact that she needed more of everything. I think she needs more information in her video essay and if she does that it will make her project more complete.
I used the students guide very little for this review. I did use a little of the advice that was given for writing effective content. I looked at how to use statistics effectively and then applied it to how it was used in her video essay. I think that she could benefit from linking statistics and quotes with the images in the background to hammer home her argument.
Overall I was very impressed with how the stats that were used were effective. I think that in my essay if I can somehow link my evidence directly in and emphasize the evidence in my argument that my essay will be more effective. I think that any sort of re-focus on the evidence will help my out in my paper.
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