This blog will be the last editorial report that I write for this project, although editing will continue throughout the next several days. This blog will focus a lot on the same things as the last blog did; the content and form reconstruction in a certain section. This report will focus on one of my main sections for this video where I talk about the interviews that I had to conduct for project 2 and how they affected me.
The content of this section did not change that much in total. I did reorganize a few things and trim off some sections so that the main section itself would stay focused on the topic a lot more. Otherwise the content of this section did not need to be changed much; the main goal of this revision was to get the ideas of the section to be more focused and generally more clear.
The form of this section did change a good amount though. As I was eliminating some words here and there, the section itself got shorter. In addition I had to take out some of the awkward pauses between words that should not have been there as well as adding some pauses to places where I thought that they should be. I also eliminated an entire sentence at the end of the section that organizationally just did not fit in the section. It appeared to have been a lead in for another section that just did not happen. It might have also been me trying to bring home another point, but that obviously did not work very well. In essence it had to be deleted either way.
Here is the pre-edit version, here is the post edit version. I must still warn you that there was a lot of editing that went on before the pre-edit version as well that you will not be able to hear, this might have been a contributing factor to the ending awkward sentence in the section in the old cut.
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