Local Revision: Variety

This is the last blog post before the first project is due, that means that this is the last blog to focus on the production of the QRG. I intend to focus on the different structural aspects of the QRG and what needs to be changed or perhaps what was done well.

I would say that my essay has a wide variety of sentence structures, I think I used all the different sentence structures effectively and in a useful matter. I used simple sentence structures quite a lot though, although this isn't necessarily a bad thing as a QRG should be short and to the point. This use of simple sentence structures can sometimes lead to about 4 simple sentences in a row before using a different type. This can be changed though if it is creating a flow problem when reading. The Rules for Writers suggests just changing up the order to some sentence structures in order to keep the audience engaged, for example putting the object before the subject and verb or using multiple combinations of sentence structures in a row instead of using the same structure in a long row.

The paragraph structures and transitions are generally effective. There is a strict organizational flow between paragraphs or sections that allows the readers mind to just transition from section to section. Most of these sections begin with a general opening statement or topic sentence then go on to give evidence and analysis of these topics. These paragraphs usually end with some sort of conclusion of the topic for that paragraph or section. The next paragraph or section will build off the previous one and its ideas, in this way the sections are not only able to be read independently but also as an entire unit.

I would say that there is some variation to the vocabulary that is generally used. The vocabulary used in this QRG is generally straight out of my own vernacular and grammatical speech patterns. Nevertheless I tried to put in more effective and more descriptive vocabulary without making the essay too flamboyant or intellectually wordy. But I still think there is some room for adding more flavorful words. The draft's vocabulary has its own strengths and weaknesses especially when considering that it is not the most intellectually written paper out there and it also doesn't use the most descriptive and colorful words around. Instead the draft uses words that tell the story as it is and plainly describes what occurs in the controversy.

Anonymous, "Variation in Candy", via Pixabay, Public Domain